posted 5 years ago in Reception
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  • Post # 3
    719 posts
    Busy bee
    • Wedding: August 2014 - South Bonson Pier & Community Centre


    Hi! I think you did a great job! I made a few notes:

    beginning: I would maybe state that you met in high school earlier (eg:) “For those of you who don’t know me, I am Lindsay’s matron of honour, and I have had the privilege of being her best friend since grade ten. Now, it goes without saying that I always think of her as beautiful, but tonight …”

    Third para, second sent: “… for the way that she way supports …” (remove second way)

    end of third para: “..flying out, the she busted out the dance moves” (the > and)

    fourth para: “…have gleaned from…” (I don’t like the use of glean here – it’s kinda labour-intensive in its meaning, like it’s a little hard to get at, but worth the effort. I would maybe change the phrasing so the fact that they’re perfect for eachother is obvious).

    fourth para: you start with them being ideal compliments, so i think with the puppy story, you need to tell how Trevor responded, or you need to drop it/rework it.

    end fourth para: who’s megan?


    Thinking about the whole thing, I think the part about her fiery temper should maybe be minimized a little bit (the drywall punching) and Trevor’s good qualities should maybe be highlighted a bit more to compensate. I think the Gwen Stefani dancing kinda captures that she’s a spitfire, without making her seem spastic.

    Anyway, those are my two cents. I can only hope my MOH’s speach is as entertaining! xo

    Post # 4
    135 posts
    Blushing bee
    • Wedding: June 2008

    I think you mean “blunt cut bangs”?  Please don’t say “blunt cunt bangs” unless that is seriously what you mean. 😛

    Other than that, it is really awesome. Well done.

    Post # 6
    129 posts
    Blushing bee
    • Wedding: May 1993

    @jules28:  Your speech is obviously filled with incredibly touching and loving information about your friend and her Fiance.  You are obviously a great person, and I wish you had been MY maid of honor!  HOWEVER — I would strongly recommend that you cut the speech down by at LEAST half, if not more.  I would cut the entire third paragraph, and in the fourth paragraph use only the first three sentences, plus the ending portion from “She’s like a bomb…” down.  I strongly recommend that you record yourself saying out the whole speech and then listen back and time it….you want your speech to be loving and impactful, and not something that will have people checking their watch….

    Post # 7
    1839 posts
    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: May 2013

    i’m going to be honest. i didn’t finish reading because it is WAY too long.

    ETA: i feel like this sounds mean and i didn’t want it to!  it’s great that you have so many nice things to say about your friend, but i think people will have a hard time paying attention to such a long speech.

    Post # 8
    1650 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: November 2015

    @jules28:  Not sure about the length. I always like speeches at weddings and showers to be short, to the point, and sweet. As it stands, it seems too long to me right now and, if you were to give this speech in full in front of me, I would probably tune out half-way through.

    The general idea though is nice. I would cut down on the stories about your past together a bit and maybe get rid of some stuff about her “high energy” and “temper.” I love the second to last and last paragraphs though.

    Post # 10
    344 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: September 2012

    @jules28:  I think you are definitely on the right track.  I really like that you’re illustrating your relationship with her, describing her characteristics, and, perhaps most importantly, how she and Trevor are right for each other.  I would just cut down the total content, probably by about a third. I’d vote to omit the karaoke, the puppy, and the jewelry saleswoman stories.

    Good job – you’re a good friend to be so thoughtful about this. I’m sure it will turn out great.  Have a wonderful time at her wedding!!

    Post # 11
    1211 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2014

    I think a speech should never go over 3 minutes. I would record yourself doing this and see what it comes out to and then cut accordingly! It’s got a lot of sentiment though, which is amazing! 

    Post # 12
    1681 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2013

    I’ll add to PP, I thought it was good but too long. I was too lazy to finish. Short, sweet, and to the point is best! Don’t worry that her parents aren’t saying anything. Our best man gave a 4 min speecn and my Maid/Matron of Honor gave a 2 minute speech. No one cared that they were short. Actually, they were glad.

    Post # 13
    367 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: June 2014

    @jules28:  Cut out the talk about growing up. People do not want to hear that. It can be shorter too

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