(Closed) My vows: constructive criticism requested

posted 7 years ago in Ceremony
Post # 3
5572 posts
Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: June 2011

They made me cry LOL but I’m a super emotional person anyway. That being the case, I loved your tears comment! I would laugh 🙂 I think they’re perfect!

Post # 4
2701 posts
Sugar bee

I really like them! I am all for getting a quick laugh but I think the part about your tears will make people wonder why he makes you cry? I dunno, I wouldn’t laugh, I would be a bit unsettled. I love everything else though! The last comment is a big slice of cheese and I hope you keep it. It’s just sweet.

Post # 6
2114 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: November 2012

I didnt get the your tears part either : 


but otherwise I think they are great and super sweet!

Post # 7
2701 posts
Sugar bee

@iheartnerds: oh gotcha! That makes sense now. Do lots of guests know you’re an emotional person? I am not emotional AT ALL so I misinterpreted it, sorry. It is like another language to me haha.

Post # 9
4771 posts
Honey bee
  • Wedding: November 1999

Honestly, it sounds a bit generic right now.  I thought the point of writing your own vows was to add something personal and I don’t see that here.  It just seems like a bunch of copy and pasting from vows that have been done. 

Somehting to add is something like “I promis to let you go wait in line when a new apple product comes out, and even buy it though it is overpriced.”

Something meaningful and specific about you as a couple or about him as an individual, I think those the reasons for writing your own.

And Def don’t say “most of them mine” I was like WHAT?! Either you’re depressed or he has no sence of humor, I still don’t know what you’re tryying to say, but I don’t think it’s funny.

Post # 10
2607 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2011

“every day of our lives”?  “every day of your life”? “every day of my life”?

Post # 12
313 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

I know that some people are, but I am not a fan of “haha vows” where you promise to pick the lint from his belly button and so on and so forth. I love that you kept it simple and touching… I teared up a little. 🙂

Post # 13
7431 posts
Busy Beekeeper
  • Wedding: October 2009

I would take out the part about the tears as well, because I thought the same thing as ChubbyBunny. Other than that, I think they are fine. For the ending, maybe you could say “for the rest of our lives”?

Post # 14
96 posts
Worker bee
  • Wedding: September 2011

I think they’re lovely.  Kudos to you for getting started even if you aren’t sure you are doing your own vows!  I’m totally dreading writing mine because I don’t know how I’m going to put into words how I feel about Fiance.  Seems like so much pressure to say the perfect thing, but Fiance wants us to write our own, so guess I better get crackin…..

Post # 15
1489 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2012

These are good and from the heart.

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