(Closed) My vows…what do you think?

posted 5 years ago in Ceremony
Post # 4
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: September 2013

@kswiftbride:  personally I think it is too long but that is just me:) I would, myself, use the last 2 paragraphs (possibly add a tiny bit more to the first but last paragraph). The first 3 paragraphs sound more like a speech that you might do at the reception….IT IS LOVELY THOUGH so please dont take offense….everyone is different and I am a keep it short kinda girl:)

Post # 5
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

it’s nice of course, but I must agree with the PP, it’s very long.  Will you be able to make it through that without having a breakdown?  I guess personally I have a hard time understanding the long speeches people tend to write as part of vows, since vows technically are what you vow to do and not do during your marriage, not a proclaimation of your love.  The first 3 paragraphs, I’d say in a toast at the Rehearsal Dinner or in the letter I plan to write to him for our wedding day.

The actual vows part is nice, although I think you say promise way too much.

Post # 6
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: May 2014

@kswiftbride:  It’s nice, but as PPs said, it is quite long. Maybe try to make a bigger impact with less words? 

Good luck and congrats!

Post # 7
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: May 2013

I would take the second paragraph… and then the second last one… both as is, then I’d take the last one but maybe say promise less…and I think if it were me I would make the very LAST line something sentimental, and move the laugh with you (maybe at you) earlier.

that’s just me, but I think it is very nice 🙂

Post # 10
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

@kswiftbride:  just remember, that even if it takes you 1.5 minutes here, it may take less or more on the actual day – more if you’re tearing up, less if you’re not used to public speaking since we all tend to read much faster when nervous!  Also, if you’re not used to public speaking, 1.5 minutes will seem like a lifetime when you’re actual saying them in front of all your guests!

Post # 11
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: December 2015

@kswiftbride:  I like it, it’s not too overy sentimental and there are no poems involved. As for it being too long, maybe cut a hymn? 

Post # 13
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542 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: March 2013

They are wonderful!!!  You did a great job.  Made me get excited and want to write mine now. lol

Post # 14
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Helper bee

To the OP: I don’t feel that it’s TOO long. It’s heartfelt, and you cover many areas in expressing your love and affection to your SO. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Post # 15
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: May 2013

I love this!! I wasnt going to write mine but you have inspired me!!

Post # 16
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Newbee
  • Wedding: June 2013

I love it!  I don’t think it’s too long.

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