Post # 1
I’m working on designing & printing our Ceremony Programs. On the back we’re listing a ‘in loving memory’ of section… there is a short paragraph that ends with “Today and every day we remember:”
And then we want to list out our relatives… I’m not sure if I need commas or semi colons or if there’s a different better way I should do this? HELP! 🙂
Here’s how it currently reads:
thewheelsonthebus’s grandparents, John & Jane Doe; thewheelsonthebus’s Aunts, Sue Doe and Lily Doe Smith; Lily’s children Mark James & Andrew William Smith, her great aunt, her Zia, Sophia DeGennaro. thewheelsonthebus’s groom’s grandparents, Joan and Harry Murphy, great grandmother, Gertrude Armstrong, his sister, Caroline Crowley, his uncles, Jack and Kevin Murphy, his cousins, Jessica Fisher and Christopher Williams, and friend, Sean France.
Help??? I’m not sure what punctuation I should be using.
Post # 3
You could either list each entry on a separate line or use semicolons between each entry. Either of those would seem to work.
Post # 4
As a former copy editor, I second rachel leigh – semicolons are appropriate (NOT colons), as would be listing each group on a separate line begining with a “bullet point” or other point-marker and ending with a semicolon for all groups up to the last, which should have a period. Good luck!
Post # 5
So more like this:
thewheelsonthebus’s grandparents, John & Jane Doe; thewheelsonthebus’s Aunts, Sue Doe and Lily Doe Smith; Lily’s children, Mark James & Andrew William Smith; and her great aunt, her Zia, Sophia DeGennaro. thewheelsonthebus’s groom’s grandparents, Joan and Harry Murphy; great grandmother, Gertrude Armstrong; his sister, Caroline Crowley; his uncles, Jack and Kevin Murphy; his cousins, Jessica Fisher and Christopher Williams; and friend, Sean France.
?? Thanks! Jeez… we have a lot of deceased close family! Eep.
Post # 6
Do you have enough space to put them on separate lines? I think that would look best.
When you say “her” or “his” do you mean the bride or the groom or are you referring to someone else? I found that confusing. How about changing the wording to something like “Jane Doe, Aunt to the Bride”?
Post # 7
So sorry for your losses, but it’s sweet of you to remember them in this way! For ease of reading I would maybe split up your family members and your fiance’s family members into two paragraphs (if space allows! If it doesn’t, the way you posted it works too), such that it looks like this:
Today and every day we remember:
* Bride’s grandparents xx; aunts xx; …; and
* Groom’s grandparents xx; great-grandmother xx; xxx.