(Closed) Need help with invitation wording…

posted 6 years ago in Etiquette
  • poll: Which invitation wording sounds best?
    Your current version : (4 votes)
    40 %
    Mom's version - Option 1 : (1 votes)
    10 %
    Mom's version - Option 2 : (1 votes)
    10 %
    Something different (please tell me below) : (4 votes)
    40 %
  • Post # 3
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    3357 posts
    Sugar bee
    • Wedding: May 2012

    I like yours or Option 2 but I suggest you drop the “Together” from “Together with”, because “with” already shows “together”

    Post # 4
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    1154 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: June 2014

    Ugh, let me know if you find a solution.  My FI’s parents are divorced but have been remarried for years, and I was raised by my grandparents, so listing everyone is too long, but saying “together with their parents” doesn’t work for me.

    However, I would suggest that for you:

    Together with their parents

    Miss Ariel Mermaid and Mr. Eric Prince

    invite you blah blah blah

    Post # 5
    Member
    7901 posts
    Bumble Beekeeper
    • Wedding: March 2012 - Pelican Grand Beach Resort

    Honestly, they are all kind of awkward.

    First of all, I’d skip the Miss (PS, no period) and Mr. with your names.

    Second, I’d probably either say “Together with the families” or I’d say:

    • Ariel Mermaid
    • daughter of Mr. and Mrs.______
    • and 
    • Eric Prince
    • son of Ms. _______
    • Mr. and Mrs._____________
    • request….

    and I’d make your names in a bigger font and possibly different script.

    Is “half after” a regional thing? I’ve only ever seen “half past.”

    Of your suggestions, I like yours (the first one) best.

    Post # 7
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    1696 posts
    Bumble bee

    My thoughts are all about formally correct traditional protocol. The general wording for any formal event is properly:

    Hostess’s formal business name (and optionally host’s, only if she is married)
    requests the pleasure/honour of the company/presence of
    Guests’ formal social names, (hand-written into a blank space left for the purpose)
    to Event (with time, date and location)

    <– R.s.v.p. instructions in smaller print in left corner
                                         Special details in smaller print in right corner –>

     

    “Special details” are things like whether there will be dancing, the name of any special guest of honour you are being invited to meet, and so on.

    Applying the proper form to a wedding invitation being issued by the bride herself in the role of hostess, you might have:

     

    Miss Ariel Mermaid
    requests the honour of the presence of

    at her marriage to
    and Mr. Eric Prince
    on WEDDING DATE At half after twelve o’clock
    Church name Church location

    <– R.s.v.p.  


    > The bride and groom wish to recognize their parents:


    >
    Mr. Dad Mermaid and Mrs. Mom Mermaid


    >
    Ms. Mom Prince

    Post # 8
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    1696 posts
    Bumble bee

      and, the Bee doesn’t like all my fancy attempts at formatting, so it omitted Mr. Dad Prince and Mrs Step-Mom Prince from my list of honourees and deprived Mrs. Mom Prince of her bolding, but please accept that they should indeed make the list.

    It also truncated my editorial comments to the effect that this technically correct form avoids the confusion caused by “hospitality-by-a-cast-of-thousands”, clearly communicates what the guests really need to know; and in this modern day of emancipated self-supporting brides, unequivocally puts the parents in their place as “Guests of Honour”, a place which most parents have truly earned over their years.

    But the wedding industry thrives on confusion, and on the premise that “wedding etiquette” is a mythical beast unrelated to the norms of everyday formal proprieties; so I don’t really expect anyone to actually use this technically proper wording.

    Post # 9
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    74 posts
    Worker bee

    I like the version @mrsSonthebeach:  suggested, I think it sounds the best! Let us know what you decide

    Post # 13
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    7901 posts
    Bumble Beekeeper
    • Wedding: March 2012 - Pelican Grand Beach Resort

    i think the new version is fine. I’d put you and Mr. Prince on your own lines and probably break the next line between “presence” and “at” as well.

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