(Closed) Please critique my invitations (take 2/again)

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 2
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

Just some suggestions and questions.  Are your parents still married?  Why are their names written out like that?  Typically a woman’s name is always written first.  If your parents are divorced, their names should be on separate lines.  If you want to make sure that both your mother and father’s names are on the invite I would skip the Mr. and Mrs., because you don’t have them listed for your names either.

Olivia Smith


Jake Doe

together with their parents

Jane and John Smith


Joan and Jack Doe

request the honour of your presence at their marriage

Saturday, the twenty seventh of September

Two thousand and fourteen

One o’clock in the afternoon


3600 Address Road

City, Province


Cocktail Reception to follow

at five thirty in the evening


3600 Address Road, City, Province


Post # 4
56 posts
Worker bee

What about doing


Together with their parents

Mr Jack and Mrs Jane Smith


Mr Bob and Mrs Mary Doe

Sally Smith and Jason Doe

Request the honor of your presence

Does that sound more fluid? 


Post # 5
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

It’s not proper etiquette to list a couple as Mr. Jack and Mrs. Jane Smith, but you’re welcome to do it any way you like.

Post # 6
2273 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: June 2015

thelittleone:  “TOGETHER WITH MR. JOHN SMITH AND MRS. JANE SMITH AND MR. JACK DOE AND MRS. JOAN DOE” — sounds very wordy. Also, I’m not sure how your invitations look, but typically if this is capitalized, so is the rest of the invitation (sans your names.) There is usually consistency.

“Two thousand and fourteen” — Some people are picky about not having the “and” in the date.

“Cocktails at five thirty with reception to follow


3600 Address Road, City, Province”

— This information sould be on a separate reception card, not on the invitation. It is in a separate place.

Post # 7
964 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2015

with the wording I assumed that parents were divorced. I like ‘together with their parents’ or ‘together with their families’ but I assume you’ve chosen to include names as a nod to them and you wanted like that but does seem a bit wordy, does it all fit nicely on the invite?

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