(Closed) Please critique my vows!

posted 8 years ago in Secular
Post # 17
93 posts
Worker bee
  • Wedding: November 2015

This made me smile. I love them! They’re personal, but won’t alienate anybody/make them wonder the whole time what you’re talking about- and you’ve got just the right amount os silly mixed in with the sweet and serious. =) Great job! I think your FH will love them.

Post # 19
652 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2013

I love that you have both fun and serious bits in the vows. To me, it makes it feel more real/true to the relationship that you share. I know he’ll love them too 🙂

Post # 20
818 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2013

This is super sweet :’) fantastic!

Post # 21
1585 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2013

@RahlyRah: I love these vows and months later, I am still trying to find a way to phrase things as beautifully as you did without plagiarising!

Would you mind if I grabbed one or two lines from there? Your pacing is fantastic, I just can’t come up with better and it captures how I feel SO perfectly. However, these are super personal, I’d hate to know someone was using my heartfelt words without asking…so I am (even though you’d never know if I listened to you or not, *I* would know).


Post # 23
543 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2013

@RahlyRah:  absolutely love your vows! me and my fiance are writing our own also, but i made an outline so they sound the same, and he just has to fill in the blanks. Our ceremony is going to be very short also, just vows, declaration of intent and ring exchange so i think the length of you vows is perfectly fine!

Post # 24
341 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: May 2014

Beautiful vows!


Post # 26
43 posts
  • Wedding: September 2013

thanks for sharing! no critique here! 

Post # 27
973 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2012

Love them, love the mix of sweet, sensitive, fun, and playful.  And it makes perfect sense to have longer vows if you have less “other” stuff in the ceremony, and they will mean more because they are personal.  We didn’t do personal but did patch our own vows together in a secular cerimony, and I don’t think it lasted 10 minutes with a reading my best friend did. 🙂

My only thought is leave out don’t go to bed angry… it’s just not realistic. There’s times you just HAVE to go to bed.  You/he have work  in the morning, at the time you’re both too raw/angry/hurt and not getting anywhere… I know it’s a wives tale to not go to bed angry. But sometimes it’s really needed as long as you don’t hate each other and it’s just the unhappy place you are both in at the moment. Space and time can do wonders for helping you/he calm down, see what’s important or phrase your thoughts rationally, etc. The beauty of a good marriage is you can argue, be annoyed with each other but still 100% love each other.

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