(Closed) Please help review my invites!!!

posted 6 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2012

Very cute! I think the light gray is a little hard to read. Not sure how readable it will be on paper though — could be better… could be worse!

Post # 4
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

I think they’re cute, but I don’t like how the text is in  oppiste directions on the first shot.  I think it makes it hard to read and I kept having to bounce my head back and forth to really read it.  Pick one direction and stick with it, instead of two.

I also agree with PP that they gray is hard to read. 

I tihnk the wording on the invite is weird too “exchange vows of forever” doesn’t make grammatical sense to me.  Shouldn’t it be “exchange vows for forever” or something?  I think “of” is the wrong word, IMO.

Post # 5
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Worker bee
  • Wedding: October 2012

@FMCollado:  The words you used were lovely! I think the color scheme is quite nice too. But I found the rotated wording difficult to follow and the address placement was distracting. I wasn’t sure where to look next. I love your little owls!

 

Post # 6
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

I think it should say “in your honor” (is the r missing?)

The style is unique and looks cool.  If it is what you like, then it is great!

Post # 8
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: September 2012

To be honest, I find the layout confusing.

I don’t mind the extra information such as the address being oriented vertically, but having the first line vertical, my eyes just go to your names first and skip over “You are invited…”. It’s as if you need to make it so that you can just read the horizontally oriented text and have it make sense on its own and is just the essential information.

I don’t understand why “as we” is highlighted? 

So, I guess that you are hosting yourselves? The wording is a little odd because it’s passive voice and if you read it through you use the word ‘our’ before identifying yourselves.
You could try,

“Because you have shared in our lives/

With your friendship and love, we/

Jheramis/

and/

Andy/

Invite you to witness as we exchange vows and are united as husband and wife/

on Friday, September twenty-first/

…”

 

 

Post # 9
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

I also find the layout confusing.  I understand you’re going with a Harry Potter theme, which is cool, but I’m not sure all of your guests will understand.  As a non Harry Potter fan, I had a hard time figuring out where I needed to start reading and then had to keep tilting my head.

The date should read: Two thousand twelve (without the and)

 

Post # 10
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Newbee
  • Wedding: September 2012

I totally agree that the layout is confusing.  I like the colors together but I think people will have to cock their heads or turn it to read it.  The transition is very chopping from “our new life together” to “as we” to “exchange vows”.  I think you’re close though!  Good luck!

Post # 11
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

@FMCollado:  I’m a huge HP fan, and I’ve read every book and seen every movie…and I don’t see that theme in here at all.  Just saying…

Post # 13
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: June 2012

I like em. after reading your reply to one of the PP’s- I realized that your doing a HO Theme, AWESOME. I love love love HP. so this is so unique.. Just darken the font alittle cuz its slightly hard to read. I had to squint my eyes to read lol.

Post # 14
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

Don’t let anyone bum you out. You like them. I like them. I think they are different and interesting.  Go for it!!

Post # 14
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2011

It’s cute but I also don’t like that the “You are invited….” lines are vertical, it just doesn’t flow well since you have to skip through the names & initials to finish the thought.  I don’t mind the address being rotated, but it bothers me that it is the opposite direction from the “You are invited” part.

I’d put the “You are invited…” lines horizontally, beneath your monogram, which would seem to better match the format of your response cards.  However, when you put that whole sentence together it is kind of a run-on, the choice of words to bold is odd, and I’m not sure about the comma:

“You are invited to celebrate the beginning of our new life together as we exchange vows of forever in friendship and love, and are united as husband and wife”

I also agree with PP that pointed out that there is no “and” in two thousand twelve.

ETA:  OK so I read your response and see that the “as we” was intended to be read “as we, J & A, exchange vows”.  So I would say reading it cold it is not as obvious.

Post # 15
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: September 2013

They’re a bit confusing, as everyone else has already said. I like that you’re not doing a “typical” invitation, but I think the invite should be more like the RSVP where only one bit of information is rotated. If you left just the location turned, I think that may look better.

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