(Closed) please proof my invitation wording!

posted 9 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
Member
272 posts
Helper bee

Dr. and Mrs. Robert Alden
request the pleasure of your company
at the marriage of their daughter
Jennifer Elizabeth
to (or with)
Adam Brandon Peoples
son of Mrs. Virginia Chase
Mr. Thomas Peoples

Saturday, the twentyeighth of August
Two thousand ten
at half past seven o’clock in the evening

The Four Seasons Resort
Venue Address
City, Texas

Dinner and dancing to follow

Black tie preferred

Post # 4
Member
2083 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: May 2010

definitely agree with Cinnamon Roll – use ‘to’ instead of ‘and’ between your names!

Post # 5
Member
483 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: June 2010

I agree with the “to”, and I’d suggest an ‘and’ between your fiance’s parent’s names.  My daughter used almost your same exact format and now I’m second guessing her choice of listing her  (divorced) Fiance dad’s name before her FI’s mom’s name…

Post # 7
Member
1580 posts
Bumble bee

Looks good overall I think. Most of the things I found are personal preference and just little style things.

A couple of little things you just might want to double check:

1. I’ve seen 28th spelled out with a hyphen (twenty-eighth)

2. I’ve seen the year in all lower case letter, even the first “t”

3. What about using “and” before the groom’s father’s name? Or you could put “son of” on its own line and then put “<name> and <name>” on one line.

Post # 8
Member
45 posts
Newbee
  • Wedding: July 2010

@jalter (and others here) Catholics also use “and” instead of “to” for the same reason you listed.  Just a helpful fyi.

Post # 9
Member
45 posts
Newbee
  • Wedding: July 2010

Oh, and also, I don’t think you need o’clock. 

at half past seven in the evening   — that should be fine.

The topic ‘please proof my invitation wording!’ is closed to new replies.

Find Amazing Vendors