(Closed) Proof my invitation please

posted 5 years ago in Paper
  • poll: What do you think?
    Good to go! Print that baby : (3 votes)
    21 %
    One or two small changes (please make a comment) : (11 votes)
    79 %
    Whoah nelly! Huge issues here : (0 votes)
  • Post # 3
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: June 2014

    I haven’t got much experience in proofing invitations, but it looks good to me. And I loooove your design!

    Post # 4
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    Busy Beekeeper

    I would change:  request the pleasure of your presence to:  request the pleasure of your company (I think the double P with pleasure and presence is throwing me…. what about honor of your presence?)

    I’d also suggest:  half past four… instead of half after four

    Also – is the font size of the accept and decline different?  The deline seems lightly smaller to me – but it could just be my eyes!  I’d also make the dinner/dancing line a smaller font.

    Post # 5
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    690 posts
    Busy bee
    • Wedding: May 2013

    Have you thought of putting the year, or no?

    Post # 6
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: November 2013

    @michiru4ever:  I really like the design of your invitations … That part looks great!

    I agree with oracle above:

    – Request the pleasure of your presence … I would probably just say “Request your presence” or, like oracle suggested, “Request the pleasure of your company

    – Half after four … I would also say “Half past four” 

    – I would also make the dinner/dancing line a bit smaller 

    I’m no expert in proofing invitations, but I think these small changes would make the wording flow a bit better (and make them look even better than they already do).

    Post # 7
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    Helper bee
    • Wedding: August 2012

    Is there a reason you’re spelling “honour” the British way?

    Post # 11
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    Helper bee
    • Wedding: May 2013

     @oracle: Agreed. I would also put another one or two line spacing’s between the address and “DINNER AND DANCING TO FOLLOW” – as long as it doesn’t mess with your print margins

     The actual invitations look super cute – love the blue and brown combination! 🙂

     

     

    Post # 12
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    Bee Keeper
    • Wedding: August 2013 - The Liberty House

    I agree with the pleasure of your presence sounding strange and that the last line is too big. Other than that it looks fine! 

    Post # 13
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    Bee Keeper
    • Wedding: January 1999

    @oracle:   I was planning to make the same suggestions.  Smile

     

    Beautiful invitations!!  

    Post # 14
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    Busy Beekeeper

    @michiru4ever:  whoops!  sorry to lead you astray on the time thing!

    The only other thing I’d suggest is playing around with the font size and/or spacing so you could include the year.

    Post # 16
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    Helper bee
    • Wedding: April 2013

    Definitely half PAST four instead of half AFTER four.  Half after sounds really strange.

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