(Closed) Proof my Invites Please :)

posted 9 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
2814 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: March 2012

“By” on the 2nd like shouldn’t be capitalized and neither should “three”.  Is there an extra space in between “together” and “when” (3rd line of the body of the invite)?  I also think there should be a comma after Saturday, but I know that thoughts are mixed on that.  I think you could take out the “on” before Saturday as well.  Oh, “together with our parents” should be in commas.  

Post # 4
210 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

To me the wording sounds very long. Like a big run-on sentence. You’re saying a lot of things. And to me the line “by your friendship and love” sounds odd to me. Maybe you could change it to with your friendship. Or the line could be omitted and it would still read nice.


And if you want to I think you could lose some “filler” and unneeded words to lessen up the bulk in the response card.

For example: underneath the date you could just say


email: [email protected]

telephone: ruth 123-666-7894

website: wix.com/blahblahblha




ok.. thats just what came to my mind ๐Ÿ™‚

Post # 5
7899 posts
Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: March 2012 - Pelican Grand Beach Resort

These go in order:

Everything above your names sounds weird. I’d skip it.

Prepositions should never be separated from their objects by an enjambment, so don’t break up phrases like “of our new life together”

“When” should probably be “as”

Prepositions under 6 characters should be lowercase, so “on Saturday…”

Comma after “Saturday”

“at” lowercase

“three” lowerase

“to immediately follow” is a phrase and should not break the line

If the sites are ajoining, you don’t need to say “inside…”; just end at “follow.”

You invitation is decidedly not formal, so you should use “favor” not “favour” (unless you are doing it because you are Canadian and that’s the spelling up there)

Again, comma after Saturday

Cut “please respond by” (you already told them this is reponse info); just list the phone number, email address, and website

Should be: “Respectfully, an adults only affair” (no apostraphe b/c no possession or contraction) or maybe “Respectfully, as Adults Only Affair” but you can’t go switching cases like you did. 


All that aside, stylistically, I think the purple-pink font clashes with the background.

Post # 6
404 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: December 2012

I think the pink is a bit too shocking when it’s in BOLD. But that’s just me…

‘Kelsey Madeline’ looks like it’s in a bigger font size than “Jeffrey -‘


It does sound a little odd, and I would reword it as:


Because you have shared in our lives, we

Kelsey — & Jeffrey —

together with our parents,

invite you to share the beginning

of our new life togther.

Please join us as we exchange marriage vows on

Saturday —-

(continue from there)



Post # 7
4674 posts
Honey bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

Are you stuck with the purple text? I can understand if you want particular words to stand out but the purple and maroon (as shown on the screen anyways) clash.  If you like the maroon I would stay with all white text or if you can have the purple words outlined in black.  

Post # 12
91 posts
Worker bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

I’m getting married July 7th too:)  Love the 7/7!

Post # 13
943 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

It says “please joinS us”, change that to “join”!

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