(Closed) Rough Draft of my Vows. Need Opinions

posted 7 years ago in Emotional
Post # 3
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2126 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

Very nice and heartfelt but I wouls seriously remove the diaper part…I see what your saying but ive been to lots of weddings where there were cute little jokes in the vows and seriously…I heard crickets and it was uncomfortable.

Nice job! 

Post # 5
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2126 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

I see now…I didn’t read the bottom obviously! It will work perfect for a private ceremony. Very sweet simple and to the point. I’m not a fan of long vows either.

Post # 6
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7295 posts
Busy Beekeeper

they are very sweet. though i can’t quite put my finger on it, i feel like some parts don’t flow nicely from one to the next.  I hope you don’t mind, but i have fun editing stuff like this, so i did some to yours.  let me know what you think!  take/leave whatever you want!

Mr.MarryMeTiffany,

 

You are the most amazing man and father I have ever met. You truly are my soul mate and I can’t wait to spend our lives together.

Even though our lives are filled with crazy chaos, I love it and wouldn’t have it any other way.  And even though I feel defeated at times, you’re always there to remind me it gets better and what we are doing this for.

As we start our life together as husband and wife, I promise to Love you and be your old lady always and forever.  I promise to change your diapers when you’re old, and scratch your back when it’s itchy.  And finally, I promise to love our kids and be the best Mom I can be.

As of today, you are not only my man friend, you are also my husband, and for that I am truly (blessed/thankful/grateful/some other adjective of your choosing).

Post # 9
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1506 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: July 2011

@fresitachulita: Agreed. The diaper thing is a little bit tmi for a wedding ceremony.

Everything else is great though. Very sweet.

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