Post # 1
Based on some feedback I’ve requested some changes for our invitations. I love the look & feel but want to make sure that I haven’t missed anything.
The original post & suite…
And the new ‘main’ invitation
Deos the size or our names look more balanced with ‘Husband & Wife’ smaller?
Or should our names decrease whilst H&W increase?
Or does it look good the way it is?
Any other comments?
And now for the travelling insert (only given to those who are travelling).
Does it look ‘too busy’ ? Or the more info the better?
I’m thinking of taking out the line mentioning the apartments recommendation – assuming that ppl will think of that if staying for more than 5 nights – i dont think anyone will actually stay for more than 5 nights…
The million dollar question. Those 2 x activites, based on the wording, would you think that a cost is involved or they are ‘complimentary’?
Also just noticed that there s a typo – arranged is missing a ‘D’.
Thoughts / suggestions appreciated!!
Post # 3
Yes yes yes! This is great. Very professional 🙂
I think the size of the “Husband and Wife is fine” but I’m not sure the slant works, the rest of the invite is so linear.
I don’t think the travelling insert is too busy, I think the amount of info is good. Maybe condense the apartment information to something along the lines of “there are also self-catering apartments should you prefer, please contact Angela … [etc]”
I also wonder what it would look like if you did the 3 activities (including the dinner) in the same format as the adresses. Is Rosa a family member or tour operator? If the former maybe put “30th December: City tour – contact Rosa for details”, Then “1st January: lunch hosted by XXX, all welcome” then the same as the December 31st on for the 2nd. Just a thought anyway. I can’t really envisage what it would look like but you never know!
Either way these are just niggly things, it doesn’t need changing. It looks fab as it is!
Post # 4
@Nic01: Husband & wife is too small now, IMO.
The BBQ wording is awkward. Maybe try something like, “Name, would love for you to join us for lunch on January 1 at xx.” OR “Please join us for a lunch on January 1, hosted by xxxx.” Etc.
Post # 5
Shouldn’t it be “a lunch on the 1st of January”?
Post # 6
@ladyartichoke: thank you for your kind words – i do hope they look professional as an etsy seller is doing these up for me. I’m too embarrassed to say how long i took to ‘wipe out’ our names in paint before posting them lol
Post # 7
@Nic01: I think they look great – just a few small thoughts (really, these are me being super picky – you can definitely send them out as is):
1) I would decrease the size of your names somewhat and increase the size of Husband & Wife. Alternatively keep the sizes as is, but straighten the H&W part.
2) The third font on the travel inset, what would it look like if you used the cursive font or the purple sans serif? It’s just that it look a little misplaced as both the font and colour is different.
3) The “For any of your booking needs…” is a little long, can be shortened to “Contact Angela at… for details”.
4) I agree with pp’s that the lunch part needs to be re-worded. Perhaps something along the lines of “Please join us for our post-wedding lunch hosted by X”.
5) Does everyone know how to get hold of Rosa?
6) Reading the extra activity part I would assume that I would have to cover it myself.
Post # 8
OMG I loved Hahndorf when I was there! 😀 And Barossa – OH GOD YES. I didn’t.want.to.leave. You’re so lucky to be getting married in Adelaide 🙂 It’s beautiful up there!
Now… moving on to the invitation. It’s beautiful, but there are some things that sort of popped out at me, so I’ll list those. Take my advice with a grain of salt, haha!
1) I agree with @ladyartichoke – the slant of “Husband and Wife” in the main invitations seems kind of odd with the linearity of the rest of the invitation.
2) It should be “The following activities can be arranged”. You’re missing the ‘d’ (I know, I’m pedantic, sorry!).
3) I feel like the first paragraph of the “Travelling” insert is sort of too long. Maybe try breaking it up, like:
“Adelaide is less than a 2HR flight from Sydney
Nestled between beautiful beaches and vineyards of South Australia
There is something for everyone…”
Make it lead into the invitation to lead the audience (your guests J) into your invitation.
4) The full-stop/period at the end of “Please mention our wedding for preferential rates” sort of bugs me… I don’t know why.
And that’s it! J The invitation looks splendid! 🙂
Post # 9
Just realised you mentioned the ‘d’! I suck! LOL
Post # 10
– I think the size of the entire area of your names “Nicole XXXX & Anx XXXX ” and the text “Husband and Wife” should be equal in size. For example – each seperate area should have an imaginary 2×4 box in it, and all the text in that area should fill up that box. Does that make sense? I will try to edit your image when I get home, if it doesn’t.
The ampersand (&) between your names is too large right now and could be made smaller.
– Does Angela handle all booking needs, or just the apartment booking needs? IF I call her for one of the hotels you listed, will she know what I’m talking about? I think you can take out the apartment section. You’ve provided SO MUCH info already that I’m actually getting a bit confused!!
– Rosa looks like she’s someone’s mom. Is she OK handling a bunch of activity bookings? Phone calls from people who think she’s a travel agent? You already listed one agent before her, I thought Rosa was another until I read the top of your actual invite.
– Do you have a wedding website? Activities and whatnot can just go on the website, maybe you could just mention “Visit our wedding website at GoingToTheChapel.Wedding.Com for more information about accomodations, area activities, and more!”
Then at least on the website you can mention something more direct, like “These activities have been suggested if you have some extra time during your stay. Please contact Rosa at [contact info] for more information about booking an excursion!” (OR you could just use that wording on the invite)
Post # 11
@CakeyP: I’m just about to tuck myself into bed but thought I’d check the post- & I’m glad I did as it looks like I have some reviewing to do in the morning !
Angela is a travel agent who can organize everything . Although the more I think about it the less those details are required. Domestic flights are so easy to book & the hotel / motel details are all listed. As mentioned I dTNT think anyone is staying for an extended period to consider an apartment.
rosa is my mum. All of my family & friends are from interstate & they will be the only ones getting this insert. So, everyone knows who rosa is .
and there is no wedding website. We aren’t expecting many traveling guests- which is why I wanted to give an overview of the days that I’m happy to plan
ill have a look at all the suggestions in the morning but thought I’d clarify the above. Thank you for everyone’s help!!
Post # 12
I, personally would leave the main invite as is. I actually like the slant. And the sizing of all the text.
The traveling insert is not too busy. I agree with shortening the wording about Angela. Are the 2 events at the bottom things that will definately be happening, and people can come if they want or things that will only happen if people contact Rosa. Also, how do I contact Rosa?
Post # 13
@Nic01: Ok. On the first invitation (the other thread), husband & wife was WAY too big. Unfortunately, now that it’s smaller the slant looks weird and out of place. If you changed it back and made it about the same size as your names, that would balance it out more. I think when “Husband& Wife” was stretching out wider than the smaller words, it worked well.
I would still put a phone number for your mom. Even if I know her, I may not have her number.
Post # 14
@MexiPino: ok, consenus is that the size of our names / & h&W is simply not working. I sometimes find it difficult to ‘vocalise’ what I’m trying to explain via email to the graphic designer but I will copy & paste what@CakeyP: has said.
Lunch wording will change to one of the below – i want to make sure that the format of the dates on the insert (ie. 30 Dec + 2 Jan) remain consistent.
XX, would love for you to join us for lunch on January 1 (or 1st of Jan??)
Post # 15
@Nic01: I would phrase it like this (obs, comma removed):
XX would love for you to join us for lunch on the 1st of January.
Then use the same format for “the 2nd of January”.
Post # 16
@eocenia: thank you for taking the time to post your feedback! That font does ‘annoy’ me. It is used throughout the rest of the suite. I will ask to have it in the nice cursive font – thanks for trhe suggestion!
Excellent that you think you’d need to pay for the extra activities – that’s what i was going for.
In regards to the contacting Angela….
Shall I leave that area out? So, no Angela nor apartment suggestion? As mentioend, i don’t know if anyone even uses a travel agent for domestic travel (i don’t & neither does my family)…so, waste of space?
Shall I just modify it to: Contact Angela at… for bookings