Post # 1

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Bumble bee
A little invitation help. I don’t know why this is so difficult, but I am trying to have a mix of sentimental and formal. Whaddythink? I will also take suggestions…
We learn to experience love in our families and our friends…
this unity of new love will not be complete until you share with us this special day
We request the honor of your
presence at the marriage of our daughter
Tabitha Wordlaw
to
Patrick Franklin
Saturday, September 1, 2012
at 4:00 p.m.
Wynn Wedding Chapel
Las Vegas, Nevada
Phillip and Veronica Gordon
Post # 3

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Busy Beekeeper
I think that sounds good! there are so many different ways to do invitations these days.
here are some idea’s but i don’t think you need to change a thing
http://www.invitationconsultants.com/samplewording.aspx?p_subcategory=3
Post # 4

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Newbee
The opening line is very pretty!
Just a few minor suggestions:
Write “September 1st” or “the first of September”
Write “four o’clock” since the pm isn’t needed you’re not getting married at 4am. 🙂
Great job!
Post # 5

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Bumble bee
Thank you! There is where I got this one 🙂
Should I say “We learn to experience love in our families and our friends…”
or “We learn to experience love through our families and our friends…”
or “We learn to experience love with our families and our friends…”
Does that small change completely change the meaning?
Post # 6

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Helper bee
I do love the opening line and LOVE the Wynn chapel.
The request may sound more formal worded:
Mr. Phillip and Veronica Gordon request the honor of your
presence at the marriage of their daughter.
I also agree with the date verbiage, it sounds more formal written out.
Post # 7

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Bumble bee
@Malloryray:
@Happy7: Love the suggestions!