(Closed) Very first invitation mock up EVER – need feedback please

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2009

you should write out the date.  I also wouldn’t put the website on the invite.  That should be a separate insert.  I think the part about the “adult evening” could also go on a separate insert.  Keep the official invite for the ceremony only.

Post # 4
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

I think it is fine to have it all on one piece of paper, its less wasteful. I do think there may need to be a few tweaks, it is kinda weird to have the date written like that followed by the more formal six o’clock in the evening thing. It seems to go back and forth between formal and casual invite. 

Post # 5
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2011

I’d center your names – they’re already centered, but they look like they’re off to the left a bit.  I’d also write out the date, since you wrote out the time.

Post # 8
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: September 2010

@babybluz: she erased part of the last names for privacy, that’s why it looks off center.

you don’t have to write out the date – it’s all aesthetics, really. We had a super modern invite, and had our date as “09.11.2010” because it looked great with the invite design. You can do whatever you want!

Post # 10
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: June 2011

I think it’s fine all on one card – I did the same thing.  I would either change the time or the date so they match up a little more in terms of formality.

It’s hard to tell on my screen, but is the request your presence section in the same color ink?

I think I would make the line this:  Adult only evening of merriment to follow and I would put that in the same font as the rest.

I would maybe put the website sentence in a smaller font, too. 

Great job though!!!

Post # 11
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

@KristenGotMarried: Love that succulent at the top! Your invites look really good ๐Ÿ™‚

I might suggest is to use a script that looks more like calligraphy [than handwriting] for your names and the reception line. My invites follow a similar typestyle with those two elements. And maybe try moving ‘dinner and’ to the bottom line with a hard return. Great job!

Post # 12
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: November 1999

There are way too many fonts going on.  I think it’s perfectly fine to have the website on the invite.

Post # 13
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: June 2010

I really like this.  What are the dimensions?

Post # 14
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Newbee
  • Wedding: September 2011

I *LOVE* the ampersand on the font!

I like the handwriting style.  I think calligraphy will be a little bit more formal, but the font is cute.

Overall you did a great job!

Post # 15
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: August 2011

Great mock-up ๐Ÿ™‚

A few thoughts:

– You might want a space between “Together with their families” and your names, since you have a space between your names and “request the honor of your presence” – it would center your names between those lines.

– Maybe put your names in orange to make them pop a little more?

– It’s a little bit strange that the “request the honor of your presence” is in a larger font than “together with their families”.

– I’m not a huge fan of the off-kilter lettering in the handwriting font – but I *love* the ampersand! it’s like a little pig tail ๐Ÿ™‚

Post # 16
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: February 2011

I agree with thesejoys. I would make the “together with their families” and “request the honor…” the same size.

Also, I LOVE the handwritten font and the yellow ampersand! You could try spelling out “Saturday, May nineteenth / two-thousand and twelve”, but I don’t think it’s necessary. Like someone else suggested, it’s very common to opt for the more modern “00.00.0000”. You could even say “Saturday, May 19, 2012”. I don’t know. Maybe play around and see what looks best?

I also don’t think there’s anything wrong with putting the website at the bottom of the invitation, especially if you’re not having insert cards. As a guest, it’s easier for me to keep track of just one piece of paper.

I think you’re definitely on the right track! Looks great.

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