(Closed) What is a great opening sentence for a cover letter?

posted 7 years ago in Career
Post # 3
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: August 2010

I usually start with:

” I heard about your need for a [position] at [company]. I have an invested interest in [subject matter] and believe that my education and experiences are appropriate for the position.”

I don’t know if it is Really good but I feel like it is formal and does the trick without using too many adjectives.

Post # 4
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2010

Mine is simply:

“My name is FutureKMM and I am interested in position XYZ at ABC Company.”

Short, simple and to the point.  I get into why I am interested and why I think I’d be a great fit through the content of the body of the cover letter.  It’s worked well for me in the past and seems to be working for me now in my current job search too.

I think the fancy, adjective filled openers sound kind of contrived and fake if I’m going to be totally honest.  Seems like the applicant is trying too hard.

Post # 5
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2012

My opening sentence:

I would like to thank you for the opportunity to have my resume review for the available x position with x company…

Post # 6
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Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: June 2011

“In response to your recent job posting, I am writing to apply for the position of..”

Post # 7
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

I saw this one and thought it was so cool! So not stuffy, but totally needs to be job-appropriate (i.e. not applying to a law firm, but an ad agency):

 Good day (Insert name(s) here)!

I just finished reading your website and I felt compelled by the power of Bill Bernbach to write to you and introduce myself. I hope you have 5 minutes or are a speed reader with less than a minute to spare.

We haven’t met before, but I think we should. You want interesting people, in fact you need them. So here I am – wanting to work for your agency. You have no idea how badly I want this – I actually dream about it.

I want to work as a copywriter in a Jr. position, an internship. Heck, I’d even dress up like a fern and stand in the front foyer during business hours to add to the decor if it meant me getting a crack at this place. All I need is enough to clothe, feed and house me. If you can do that at a minimum then we’re talking. If you can’t well I guess I could consider making an outfit out of loin cloth and sleeping in a self constructed log cabin in the woods. After all, I am from Canada and know how to survive this thing we call “winter” and we love the outdoors – a lot. As for the food part, I was never any good at fishing or hunting but I suppose I could give it a try if I had to, we have lots of moose and geese up here.

If you can’t stand the thought of me dressed as a potted plant in your office, then know that I just got a gig freelancing for Saatchi.

I realize you probably get more ‘job application’ emails than you could possibly shake a stick at – but I doubt you get many like this. So before you delete this I ask that you do a few things for me (I know we just met, relax, I am not asking you on a date or anything):

Read the cover letter I wrote for you (because I think it is super cool and therefore you will too) and take a look at my CV – it is unlike anything you’ve ever seen. I promise.

With all that in mind I have attached the following:

1. A mugshot so you can see who you are dealing with
2. Cover letter
3. Resume
4. An ad that I made just for you

The attachments are big so I would really appreciate it if you could email me to let me know that you received my application. This way I will know that this email hasn’t ended up in the nebulous world of the internets.

Also, you should know that my portfolio dwells in this internet cave:

(insert web address of online portfolio) – keep an eye out for the cover letter inside.There is a lot of spec ad material in there. You will find the most relevant stuff in the “JKL” folder. If I modified an ad previously made I simply included the original, labeled it as such and included my revised versions with the new copy, you tell me if I improved the ads. Some of the ads are original concepts that I wrote and designed myself. My favourite work is in the “ABC” and “XYZ” folders.

Thank-you very much for considering my application and I hope to hear from you soon!

Cheers,

Post # 8
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: October 2009

Mine is really short and sweet “my name is X and I am an experienced “insert old title” or “exprienced _____” and am interested in the position of X at X company.

Post # 9
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: May 2012

I think too many adjectives can seem fake and you want someone to get to the point and not ramble.  I try to keep it simple, so they know in a quick glance what it’s about.  “I am writing to apply for the X position at Y Company.”  “Please accept my attached resume for the X position with Y Company.”  My cover letters are already verging on the point of long w/info so I try to be concise wherever I can!

Post # 10
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: May 2012

Oh!  Forgot to say, if you were recommended by a friend who is an employer there, mention her name in the first sentence!

Post # 11
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

Keep it short and sweet. Many employers don’t even read cover letters.

No need to say your name, your signature is on the bottom. Just say that you so and so has referred you to the vacant position.

Do some research and find out what is one cuurent issue for the company. Mention something about it and link it to your skillset.

Most importantly, have someone review your letter and resume for grammatical errors or misuse of language. Spellcheck and grammar check won’t find all the errors. An application can be tossed in the wastebasket for something like”invested interest’ which should be “vested interest”.

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