(Closed) will you please proof read?

posted 6 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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3255 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

@angb1230:  There should be a comma after noon (see below):

Saturday, the twenty-second day of September, in the year of our Lord two thousand twelve at high noon, the honour… 

Also, why is punch capitalized? 

I would be consistent and use a / instead of a comma between Medieval and Renaissance being that you did so at the bottom of the invite. 

I would personally simplify it to say: Medieval and Renaissance is encouraged but not required. 

Otherwise, it looks good to me! I am an English teacher, so hopefully I caught everything. 🙂

Post # 5
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3175 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: May 2012

I just skimmed, but I would recommend adding the bolded words

“bear witness to the marriage of”

“Sunday, the twenty-third day of September”

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