(Closed) Wording review, please?

posted 9 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
193 posts
Blushing bee

"Meepsie Meeps" <— Awesome  


I am by no means a professional invitation-worder, but my two cents is that you should eliminate all of the words in brackets except for "share [in] our first day". The bracketed words before the dates and locations aren’t necessary, and while I prefer the meaning of "share [with us] our first day", it makes for a more awkward sentence – "share [in] our first day" sounds better.

Also, I prefer "dinner" to "buffet", and "New York, New York" to "New York City". Dunno why; guess it sounds more formal.

Anyway, just my thoughts. Posts photos of your invites when your done!


Post # 5
38 posts
  • Wedding: July 2009

I believe the it should read "Two thousand and ten" but I could be mistaken. You might want to look into that one.

Post # 6
570 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: January 2009

It is actually Two Thousand Ten, as the and in numbers indicates a decimal point.  The ONLY reason I know this is because I just taught it to my fifth graders…  πŸ™‚

Post # 7
820 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: July 2009

Looks great, just throwing in my two cents!  



With the love and support of our families,

Miss Meepsie Meeps


Mr Future Meeps

Joyfully invite you to share in our first day as husband and wife

Friday, January Fifteenth

Two Thousand Ten

at Seven o’clock in the evening

Venue Name 

New York, New York

Dinner, dancing and merriment immediately following the ceremony.

Post # 8
193 posts
Blushing bee

Hee. No, I don’t think you need to warn them about the buffet. While I happen to find buffets primally satisfying (there something about knowing that I can always get up and get more food), some people happen to not like them. However, most of their complaints are about not knowing how long the food has been sitting under the heat lamps, etc., which won’t be a concern at your reception.

If you did want to indicate the dinner style, you could add a menu card to send out with your invites. It wouldn’t give them an option of what to order; it would just lay out the appetizers, dishes, and desserts that you’ll be serving that day, informational-style. I always like to know what I’ll be eating.

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