(Closed) Wrote my own wedding vows. Needs thoughts/advice please.

posted 7 years ago in Ceremony
Post # 3
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Newbee

Beautiful! I love them. How long did it take you to wite them/to finally decide what to say? I am getting married next july and have wrote down a few notes. Have you timed yourself saying them? i don’t know how long they should be.

 

Great job!

Post # 5
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

love it!

Post # 6
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: March 2012

I made the ugly cry face just readin those. They are beautiful.

Post # 7
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Bumble bee

@Baby_Diva: They are really beautiful but kind of long. During the wedding you may be super excited, nervous and crying, it may be kind of hard to get through all of it. Honestly, I would shorten it a little. However, you can write a little note of the rest and send it to your Darling Husband right before the wedding. My suggestion is below.

The first night we were together, you told me that you wanted to make my life better. Since that time, that’s exactly what you’ve done.  I am a better person simply because of being with you.

I love how easy it is to not only love you, but like you.  

Today, I marry you – completely assured and confident that you are my soul mate, and the man that God intended for me to spend my entire life with.

I promise you that no matter where life takes us, I will always remain by your side.

I promise to stand by you, defend you, and be your loyal spouse.

Post # 8
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Busy Beekeeper

i think they are super sweet and well written!  but i agree with Soladylike, they are long.  I would say time them and if they go over 60-90 seconds, shorten it.  As for where to shorten, i would say the middle part.  if you look at a lot of the “promises”, some are redundant and therefore can be combined/eliminated and still get the same meaning across.  

Post # 10
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Busy Beekeeper

@Baby_Diva: much better!  My only suggestions are this:

 

– Shoren the second sentence in the first paragraph to this:  I feel so proud that I have the privilege of spending the rest of my life with you.

– I find there is too much repetition of “there will  be”  in the second to last paragraph.  how about combining it with the last paragraph to something like this:

“I know there will be trials and triumph, and illness and health.  I know there will be tears, anger, and distress.  And there will be joy, excitement, and bliss.  But when there is nothing left at all…. I know there will still be you and I. Husband and wife, soul mates, in this life and the next.”

Post # 11
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: December 2011

@Soladylike: I agree completely with you  about the length.

Post # 12
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Worker bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

beautifully said!love it!

Post # 13
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: September 2011

Beautiful vows.  Now get some rest missy! 🙂

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